Second Writing Assignment: Essay.
Thursday September 25th 2008, 11:25 pm
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Women in field
The feminine soccer was born in England for return of the year of 1920. To participate of this modality of sport the women they had that to win many barriers that hindered its growth the sportswomen that they were penetrating in an area that is always dominated by men.
In Brazil the facts had not happened in different way and until nowadays still they are behind sponsorship and they do not obtain, therefore they face pair hours of working. Beyond the daily trainings the women they keep its jobs to keep the costs of the sport and to help in the income of the family.
Depite of all these problems the Brazilian selection of feminine soccer already won some championships national and South Americans and always had good participation in the world-wide championships.
In the fields the women of the soccer face the same problems faced by the men: hissing and offences in high shout, but also win this challenge.
Although the difficult situations the feminine soccer can be more and more better, it’s necessary to receive the enough support from the society and the sponsorship of great companies to increase the courage of these women for whom the modality of feminine sport continues growing up and being fortified.
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Again, Vanilde, this essay is well-organized and has good arguments. But you need to review the sentence structures and the vocabulary choices. Please, rewrite the composition and show it to me again,
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